It was a slightly awkward start, a bit monotone, not really unveiling much about anything. The main character sitting in an Amsterdam park talking to a Dutchman about Iceland and their belief in Elves.
Nothing really happens at the beginning. Just conversations, simplistic in structure. Unfortunately the chapters don’t seem to have much point to them. It isn’t difficult to read, but I was itching for something more to transpire.
The narrative occasionally switches to other people. The writing would benefit from being written in an active voice instead of passive; and not always starting the sentences with ‘he’ or ‘she’, would just make the sentences flow better.
The change of characters are not separated by another chapter, but merges into one. It does feel like the characters are kind of chucked in there, not really contributing much to the overall plot.
There are some interesting tidbits thrown in there, along with some humorous conversations. Some scenes take the reader back to references of another person, but it is difficult to have any connection with those characters. I wanted something to be memorable about this story, but unfortunately it was slightly disappointing.
There is of course potential in all work, if there were some good build-up scenes, and a climatic or defining moment for the character, I think that would have improved it quite a bit.
2 ½ stars
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